Friday Fictioneers: Bathroom Friends

Photo prompt © Rochelle Wisoff-Fields

Following Neil’s comments on the last line of my story, I have modified slightly to keep that magical feeling alive in this second version of my story. The first version (Revision A) is underneath for posterity.

 

Bathroom Friends by Kelvin M. Knight

There was no shower in the bathroom just her friends. Plonking herself on the toilet, Kelly stared at the linoleum beneath her dangling feet. Black and white shapes became familiar patterns. A bearded boy here. A girl in a funny hat there. An enormous fish whose lips blew kisses at Kelly until she pointed at that tiny trident.

‘What do you need today?’ asked bearded boy.

‘Some fun.’ Kelly pouted. ‘Everyone’s so glum.’

‘Another world?’ suggested girl in the dancing hat.

‘Yes.’ Kelly clapped. ‘A world where patience is plentiful, and dragons’ hearts burn white in the sky for everyone.’

(100 words)

Bathroom Friends by Kelvin M. Knight (Revision A)

There was no shower in the bathroom just her friends. Plonking herself on the toilet, Kelly stared at the linoleum beneath her dangling feet. Black and white shapes became familiar patterns. A bearded boy here. A girl in a funny hat there. A fish whose lips blew kisses at Kelly until she pointed at that tiny trident.

‘What do you need today?’ asked bearded boy.

‘Some fun.’ Kelly pouted. ‘Everyone’s so glum.’

‘Another world?’ suggested girl in the hat.

‘Yes.’ Kelly clapped then cheered. ‘A world where patience is pure and plentiful!’

‘Ssh,’ bellowed Mum from the kitchen. ‘Father’s asleep!’

(100 words)

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Thank you to everyone for joining in this week (18/08/17), and reading each other’s stories. You don’t have to be a Friday Fictioneer to read our stories so please don’t be shy, there is a mix of styles and storylines all inspired by the same photo.

Thanks, as ever, to Rochelle for hosting Friday Fictioneers so congenially.

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27 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers: Bathroom Friends

      1. I’m so pleased to know it arrived safely. When sending anything overseas it’s fraught with concern. Although it probably stands a better chance of making it than if I’d sent it USPS within the States. 😉

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