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Darkening Light

PHOTO PROMPT © Roger Bultot


DARKENING LIGHT 

by

Kelvin M. Knight

 

There’s this darkness inside me. I am convinced if I hack my wrist, blackness will gush out not blood.

Do it, hisses that voice.

Grimacing, I thrust the tip of her breadknife into the chopping board and position my wrist under it. If I do this, my shadow self will escape and I will be free. Free to be the real me: someone who hates falseness; who is sick and tired of this pit of sadness; someone who despises people who cannot offer forgiveness if their life depended on it.

‘So,’ I snarl, closing teary eyes.

That’s you. Not. Me.

(100 words)


This flash fiction story was written by me today for the weekly Friday Fictioneers photo prompt challenge which is hosted by the uber talented author and artist Rochelle Wisoff-Fields.

To read more stories inspired by Roger’s photo prompt, click the Blue Frog button below.

 

Happy reading. Happy liking. Happy writing. Happy commenting. Happy being.

 

All my best for a successful 2018.

 

Kelvin

Author:

First and foremost I am a reader, then a storyteller. My reading tastes are eclectic. My writing can focus around the intimacy of closed settings and may tend towards characters who might be hiding something from themselves.

40 thoughts on “Darkening Light

  1. Self-harm is on the rise here in the USA also, Kelvin. There seems to be such angst, especially among our younger people. If they survive and end up in my office, I know I have an arduous job ahead of me. Sometimes there is success.

    Powerful writing, as always.

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      1. Thanks, Kelvin. Lots of prayer behind what I do–several friends pray for me when I’m working. Without that, I don’t know that I could face some of the more serious things.

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  2. He must be very strong to be able to stab a bread knife into a cutting board. I should think that hacking away the darkness would require a most sharp knife 😉
    I tried very hard to comment on another point as everyone stated your powerful writing so well already!

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    1. Thanks, Dale. Well observed. I think he is strong. He only jabbed the tip of the bread knife into the chopping board and his hacking his rough cutting only needed to cut an artery not severe his hand although that was the strength of his commitment I think. 😉

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  3. Dude, I seriously hope this is fiction. It is so powerful that it leaves me wanting to call someone to go and check on you … SERIOUSLY! The power of your words is strong, very strong. You could use this to do a PSA (public service ad) for a suicide prevention hotline or something like that. Seriously… consider that.

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    1. Hey Jelli your concern is so touching, so you. I am so privileged you are in my writerly life. Your original conclusion was correct. This is pure fiction. I wanted to write something powerful and dark after reading Sandra and Neil’s comment exchange last time. I’ve not done dark before. I am beginning to wonder what I have unleashed. Thank you again dear friend, I am fine. 🙂

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      1. the feeling is likewise. GReat to know you’re okay. Been in two car accidents and had a fall today… going to go home run a hot bath, and curl up with my nook.

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  4. Wonderfully written, as always, only this time I could understand it a little more clearly, beating all my previous scores.
    I think the uncontaminated ‘me’ can probably set us free and help us to let go of layers of dust and negative external changes, if we realise it’s tremendous power, in time.
    I really feel sad for the narrator. I hope he finds a moment of light and chooses it over a forever darkness.

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    1. Well said, Moon; well felt.

      I hope you were not talking about scores for your stories being exceeded by my humble offerings?

      I am sure the narrator will find that spark of light. Often, suicidal proceedings are necessary to get at the heart of the matter. There is, I feel, always a moment of calm at the eye of the storm.

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  5. Dear Kelvin
    Falseness, hypocrisy, inability to forgive, overwhelmed by sadness. These are recurring themes in your writing.
    The world is not perfect, but it is good.
    Sadness is unavoidable, but it is possible to be happy.
    An inability to forgive hurts the person holding the grudge far more than the offender – and yet even the ability to forgive can be learned.
    With best wishes
    Penny

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      1. Dear Kelvin
        The story moved me too much; it moved me into concern for your well-being. Consequently, I was glad to see your reply to Jelli, who was brave enough to broach the subject outright.
        You’re not predictable in the way in which you express your themes, rather it is that the concerns I list underlie a good deal of what you write. I think we’re all a bit like that. You’ve probably realised that my underlying concern is almost always ‘What does it mean to live a good life?’ That applies even to this week’s FF story, if you look closely.
        With very best wishes
        Penny

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      2. God bless you, Penny. I thought your comment was loaded with concern. I am sorry the strength of my words ‘upset’ you. I dithered over the choice of viewpoint and first person continuous present won. It is so immediate and sooooo intimate.

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  6. Dear Kelvin,

    No doubt someone has carried out the deed for the same reasons….to let the evil escape. For others, cutting is make the other pain stop. Very well written and thought provoking.
    One suggestion. “If I saw my wrist.” To me, at first, made me think he couldn’t see his wrist. You might consider ‘cut, slash or slice’…or something like that. A good one, nonetheless.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Thanks Rochelle (and Kelly and Bjorn and Penny) for pointing out the word choice. I will change to hack (which gives a grisly picture (to cut with rough or heavy blows).

      I am with you on the self harm, Rochelle. This story was more suicidal thoughts turning into a suicidal plan/suicide in progress than self harm which is horrifyingly on the increase in the UK – amongst young adults and those in their thirties 😱

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