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Vacation, Vacation

Dear Reader

A cheeky second story for this week’s photo challenge, spurred by Penny and Josh’s comment on my first story, No Man is an Island.

This is a dialogue only story, something I rarely do in a short story, and certainly never in any flash fiction stories I have written for this photo prompt or the Friday Fictioneers photo prompt, or those submitted to The Drabble.

My hope is this story seems realistic, authentic, and is enjoyable to read.

Faithfully

Kelvin


VACATION, VACATION

by

Kelvin M. Knight

‘It’s not mankind I detest, it’s people.’

‘Then I’m glad I’ve booked us a holiday away from people, darling.’

‘Seriously?’

‘Absolutely.’

‘But you know I’m too busy to take a break.’

‘You need to make time, darling, before time unmakes you.’

‘A change, that’s all I need. A change is as good as a rest. I’ll write a new story; fill it with whatever emotions take your fancy.’

‘It’s not about what I want, or even what you want. It’s about what you need, what we need.’

‘We can’t afford it; holidays are too expensive.’

‘You said that about getting married, having children, and you were misguided then.’

‘And who was it who made sure we could afford those things, darling?’

‘Us!’

‘Us. There’s an us in fuss.’

‘And there’s me in team. Me, me, me. What affects you affects me!’

‘Please, honey, I’m okay. I am.’

‘Are you, Kenneth?’

(150 words)


Message from Karen / Josh (What Pegman Saw co-ordinators)

After two weeks in the arctic, and then a visit to a war-torn nation, I figured we all deserved a vacation. Hope you packed your swimsuit and sunscreen! After a few weeks of brutal cold here in the Midwest, I’m more than ready to head to Fiji for real–but Pegman is going to have to make do.

Your mission is to write a 150-word (or less) story, poem, or essay inspired by the location. You can use the photo provided, or you can browse the photospheres and find your own view.

Share your work using the Inlinkz button below. Reading and commenting on others’ stories is part of the fun!

Author:

First and foremost I am a reader, then a storyteller. My reading tastes are eclectic. My writing can focus around the intimacy of closed settings and may tend towards characters who might be hiding something from themselves.

16 thoughts on “Vacation, Vacation

  1. Your dialogue was funny
    The banter was so smart
    That quick and witty back-and-forth
    Is really quite an art
    They so need a vacation
    At least that’s how it seems.
    There is no “me” in “island”
    Unlike the “me” in team!

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  2. well I really like this for four reasons.
    first, because I actually read the other comments on your first submission – enjoyed them and pondered with them – and so as I came here for follow up I felt in the know.

    second, I personally love dialogue only stories – at times – and if done right – and this one was. I felt the layers here.

    third, I was already thinking about this from the last post: “A change is as good as a rest.” and would just add – A change “can sometimes be” as good as a rest. Only because I personally have had too much change at times at it was not even close to restful – but did invigorate and refresh in other ways – but took a toll for sure.

    and fourth, the beautiful message about sometimes doing what we need even if it does not make sense on paper – sometimes to stay fully alive we do this: “need to make time, darling, before time unmakes you…”

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