Update on 12/09/18
My story was published in the Carrot Ranch collection for this photo prompt – see Part II – 3rd story. Many thanks to Charli and all the ranch leaders and all who took part. Cracking stories.
After my slow start on the 24 hour free-write yesterday over at the Carrot Ranch I’ve spent this morning a meandering and a mooching, reading various other ranchers and rancher leaders and decided I was not too late to enter the August 30th themed prompt of bottleneck.
So, here we go… quick as a flash…
Hope you enjoy my la’al flash fiction story.
THIS TIME, THIS PLACE
by
Kelvin M. Knight
Standing in his pulpit, he regarded one bottleneck after another: his overworked PCC; the cavalier making of tea during the service; the choir grumbling behind him; the organ whimpering far far away.
He prayed silently, swiftly. Upon opening his eyes, he spied a congregation transformed. Now they all looked resplendent in starched white collars, whereas he was a shadow, bloated and distorted, and pinched in so many places: from his wallet to his timesharing; from his patience to his love.
Realising he was more guilty than them, he pondered the complexities of daring to share this truth with them.
(99 words)
Kelvin, you manage a punch in just 99-words. The contemplation and the underlying truth.Sharp writing.
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Why thank thee kindly, ma’am. 😄
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I feel like it’s only someone enlightened or self-aware who could have such an epiphany, and perhaps the best person to share truth. Well-written. The first paragraph was very strong.
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Absolutely. Sascha, hence the sharing. 😇
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I enjoyed this pour of flash. You portray well the trials and tribulations, personal and professional, of a minister.
And thanks for meandering my way this morning.
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My pleasure, D. 🙂
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